Fountain of LOVE
These coming stanzas were being written at 3, 44 AM ,,,and i was in a very "moody mood" , so forgive my spelling, grammar mistakes ;) ...also, forgive my bad handwriting on the image i uploaded with this post :)
You…….You…..You
It is always you
but, who are you?
let me guess...
You are not a holy person
because a holy person never does mistakes
however you did it once
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You are not an angle
because angles never hurt lovers
however you did it once
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Are you asking " when did I hurt you ?
when….. when...........Do u really want to know?
when u let me falling in love with you
and never tried to stop me
never slapped me,... and awaken me
never showed me the truth
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yes…… the truth about your mysterious persona
about the soul inside you…
about the sincere feelings
about the heart you hide behind
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Beloved, it is too late to blame
too late to talk, and finger points ..
it is a FATE more than a FREEWILL.
We have to accept our destiny
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And believe me darling
If we are destined to be together
No one can prevent it
Even lords, kings, masters or ourselves.
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But keep these coming words in your mind
That, " I loved you once"
And I will never ever stop this love fountain from flooding forever.
hey felicity :)
I liked the spontaneous emotions you've put into this text, but I couldn't help notice that the choice of words did not send us the emotional message you're trying to convey to us
I can see a structure well-built inside the text :)
keep 'em comin'! :)
Posted by
antihero |
5:25 AM
love ur comments antihero... coz u know exactly what i am looking for....
and about the words choice, i have already told u the reason why i was not good in writing those stanzas.... :)
but thanx very much for telling me what is missing ;)
keep in touch :)
Posted by
felicityq8 |
12:59 PM
:)
I read one old post of yours, called بوح مشاعري
very interesting.. i'm looking forward to read more of your arabic writings.
keep'em comin' ;)
Posted by
antihero |
1:23 PM
hey hero ;) again...
first , thanx for ur quick, honest comments
second, it is so ironic that i prefer writing poetry in english rather in arabic... but ppl like my arabic poems more than english, well some of them not all ,,
third, as long as i feel that there is someone who likes, or even read my poems, i will do my best, just to please him/her :)
thanx :)
Posted by
felicityq8 |
5:15 PM